It’s been a year.
A year of lies
Pain, misunderstanding
Of wondering who you really are
Wondering who the hell I really am
Trying to figure out when I ever felt
So much attraction to anyone else
And coming up with no answers
It’s been a year of me waiting
Trying to be patient
Trying to convince myself
That you would eventually come around
That you would care for me
In even the smallest percentage
Of what I care for you.
It’s been a year of bitter sweetness
Knowing no greater pleasure
And no greater pain
Than when I was alone with just you
But it was only ever alone with you
And no one was allowed to see.
A year of you hiding me
Like your dirty dishes
That you just can’t bring yourself
To clean up and make new and good
Or at the very least, get rid of.
It’s been a year of questions
Why would you say you care
And then break my heart
Over, and over
For reasons that don’t really make sense
Maybe I’m being selfish
It’s been a year of feeling bad
Blaming myself for your mistakes
And your heartless choices.
Wondering how I could be so selfish
As to ask for a little bit
Of your time and your heart.
It’s been a year of being reeled in
Only to be tossed back into the tempest
As soon as you’ve got me
As soon as you realize
That you’re so very bored with me
That there’s no time for me
That there’s no love for me.
It’s been a year of my time wasted
I turned down or avoided
Several others seeking me
Hoping only for you.
Fooled me once, shame on you
But you sweet-talked your way back to me
Fooled me twice, shame on me.
And now there’s nothing of my heart left
For round number three.
Please tell me what you think
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That was good. I liked it because it was a poem that was told like a story. Even with fewer words, it was conveyed the story and emotion well. I definitely felt for the voice of the poem.
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I think there are many strong points to this poem. The real human emotion was palpable and seemed to build with each passing stanza. You showed excellent word choice and kept to an effective rhythm that gave the poem its flow. Also, repetition can be a tricky thing because it often backfires on us but this is an example of how it can work really well. You timed it carefully and gave it a valued role each time... good work!
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This is pretty good. I love "and now there's nothing of my heart left for round number three." Your point comes loud and clear, and while it doesn't delve deep into the complications of love, as least not to me, you certainly do a good job presenting the heartache of a relationship where only one person truly cares.
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I know the feeling! Great job bringing out your true pain in this poem. I enjoyed reading it! thank you for sharing
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Amazing!!
That was an amazing poem to read!!I love the ending it totally wraps it up perfectly.. and it is very relateable!! Good Job...
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