There's an ache that never fades,
There's a pain that never dies,
There's a hope that can't be killed,
There's a wish for time that flies.
There are dreams you're always in,
There are thoughts you're always on,
There's a heart that you have taken,
There's a gap where you belong.
There are fears that I will lose you,
That I'll fail to hold your gaze,
That this distance will defeat us,
That I'll fade into the haze.
But I'd give anything to see you,
Renounce all for your touch,
I'd pay millions to have you hold me,
For my heart's bound in your clutch.
And I know I have my duties,
Our country I defend,
But that will never stop my longing
For this loneliness to end.
In a list
A contest entry
- Long Distance Love by PoeticusVeritas.
500 points, ended May 9, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Distance can be hard to overcome and lots of true faith is needed.You have penned much thought and emotion here and i commend you brave soldier for pouring your heart out for all to see, the gold is very well deserved
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Such sadness in far away love, I don't know how it asts sometimes, must be a torture all of it's own, wonderful sentiment here. Best to you
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this was breathtaking! i know the feeling all too well. great work!!
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i like this poem. good job ^^
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very well written! I'm humbled and impressed!
For me this really takes on many different levels of feelings when it comes to the sad subject of distance.
Take care always,
~pithyAplomb.
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Touching!
Very well structured and expressed poem of a longing heart. I really liked the flow and intensity of how it must feel to so far apart. Great Job!
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i am in the exact same situation...we are both in the army and forced to be separated...i feel like i could have written this. just keep up the hope! something will work out.
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Very beautiful.. and its touching
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Very beautiful and very touching. I wasnt actually in the situation but I dated a fellow soldier when I was in and we feared the samething you describe in this poem. You poem is also very much what I fear in my current relationship. Also the poem was written extremely well.
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this so sad, i'm going to get my sis to read this because she can relate
its wounderfull
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Great poem I like the flow and the rhyme. I can tell your sense of longing and love. Thanks for sharing!
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Written Very Well!
I really like this poem that you have written. It show's how much you really miss being with a loved one that mean's so very much to you ! I love the end as well. ( And I know we have our duties,Our country to defend,But that will never stop my longing,For this loneliness to end.Good Luck In The Contest And God Bless You Alway's !!!!!!! Brenda Gae
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This is a beautiful statement of your love and your longing. I could really feel it here. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Beautiful
This was a warm and heartfelt piece, a true testament of love. Best of luck to both of you, keep safe ~Bret~
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Wonderful
I am seeing beauty unfold the more you allow your soul shine.
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Very nice. The flow is great until the last two stanzas where it gets a little wordy. Otherwise it's a good write. Happy trails and stay saf.
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wow..
I really like this one. in a long distance thing myself and all of this rings so true. I like the flow and it has a simple rhyme which is refreshing. thank you for sharing and my prayers and thoughts are with you both on your journeys.
blessings-
Grey
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Wow, this is a wonderful poem, I really like it... I like the flow, the rhyme scheme, and I like how it actually says something meaningful, not just something that it looks like someone wrote to just have a poem on their page. Great job on this piece, thank you for sharing and good luck in the rest of your writing.
~Maria
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