A clear meadow on an early spring morn, I thought,
I remember my mother's voice, sweet in the stillness
That preceded waking life, and I breathed in air
Undisturbed by polluted enterprise, I remember it
All, and it comes back to me on a bloody field
In the dead of night, my breath struggling through
A torn cavity, my flesh seared by napalm and
My senses assaulted by the stench of my own
Dying corpse, a clear meadow swaying to the
Gentlest breeze, a hummingbird alighting on a
Fragrant rose, scenes from my memory, an undisturbed
Day, in the bloom of spring, flashbacks of better
Days, before bitter nights, and ricochets of bullet
Rounds, and I fall back to dream of those better days,
As my breath rattles in my throat, and as I close
My eyes, darkness creeping at the edges of my sight,
I sigh happily, and walk out onto a clear meadow,
Fragrances of sun drenched wheat, roses and violets
Preceding me, welcoming me in like a lover who's feet
Have carried him back home.
A contest entry
- Poetic Idol (Auditions) by TwilightBloodRuns.
315 points, ended June 8, 2008, 31 entries
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Comments
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great work.
Love the way you merge the end of the line into the start of the next in the middle of it.
"Day, in the bloom of spring, flashbacks of better>
>Days, before bitter nights, and ricochets of bullet>
>Rounds, and I fall back to dream of those better days,"
Nice work, and btw, I support bring the trrops in Iraq and Afghanistan back, so this one really hit home for me.


