I've always wondered about.
Why for me, things never worked out?
I saw, and heard things no one else did.
This all was so strange, I was just a kid.
All the time, I thought I was going insane.
Not only that, but I was to blame.
I had so much hate, and sadness inside, and
not one person in which to confide.
I felt like doing such wrong things,I would
have left this place, if I had the wings.
Always so sad, and crying, and scared.
Talking to myself, because no one else cared.
I thought I was crazy, but now I know not.
I am the sane one, the situation was not.
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Sometimes you think you're crazy, and then you see real insanity, and realize you're not. Every reaction I was having was due to what was happening to me. Actually it was my minds way of keeping me sane, and alive. It never goes away, abuse changes us, but it never leaves. I'm not crazy though, just different, maybe even gifted. Connie
Please tell me what you think
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I like different... many people are so afraid to be. I think it's rather brave and very bold.
On the insights of being crazy though... I think everyone feels this.
I like this because you just really expressed yourself so freely, not bothering much with form or anything. Even though this was the case, you still managed a great job with your freedom. For that I applaud you!
Blessed be
-Blanche
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Thanks,
Well in my life I always believed I was crazy, because what other explanation could there be. More people probably do feel this way at some point in their lives than I imagine. Most likely for different reasons though. At least that's what I hope, I wouldn't want what happened to me to happen to anyone. Thanks again, Connie
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this is a great write. Abuse can do so much damage but it can make us so much stronger.
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Thanks,
I'm glad you liked it. It took a lot of soul searching for me to figure such a simple thing out. I'm not so sure that it's made me stronger, just different. I hate to say it, but it is now a part of me, forever to stay. Connie
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Wow that is so true that is exactly how I feel. I must agree with Alpha Rats Nest I honestly love that line.
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Thanks,
I'm glad so many people got the point of this poem. Connie
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Wow. Well-written. "I am the sane one, the situation was not." I love that line.
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Thanks,
I hope it helps someone out along the way. Connie
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this is a good start but there is still a lot of things that are wrong. for example, it really doesn't flow very well. I'd suggest looking at some different types of meter and trying to incorporate them in this poem. Also I saw that you were using rhyme (which I think is great), but there were also some problems with that aspect of the poem. One rule that should always be followed is to never rhyme a word (not) with the same word (not). Sometimes it can be really difficult to find a word that will fit, but if you use the rhyme tool on the side of the "add poem" page you can usually find a word that will fit. anyways, I write a lot of rhyming poems and if you need a good example of rhyme and set meter, "The Tempest" is probably the best I can offer, right above "Lost Love." thanks for writing and good luck in the future.
This poem's critique,
Brandon
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Thanks for all the comments.
I appreciate all that you said. I'm not one on form, or technique.
I just write, it may sound strange, but I have no clue as to even what set meter is. I write to point out personal things that I think may help others. I don't want you to think that I don't appreciate your wisdom, because I do. Thanks for reading, Connie.
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