When Spring is dancing
She swirls around in rain,
digs toes into damp earth
as new buds skyward strain.
And joyous, we bloom with her.
Summer takes the floor,
she bathes beneath warm sun.
Rays grazing soft bright skin,
as growing days lengthen.
Calm and serene, we tan with her.
Autumn comes on slow,
she swings her scythe with care.
Gath'ring this years yield as
moon rises full and fair.
Contented, we feast with her.
Then Winter steps up,
snow falling from dark hair.
Stiff legs growing white frost
as cold steals the night air.
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And we sleep, and we wait.
As the seasons shift and turn and change,
we grow and learn and dance with them.
Celebrating life.
Author notes
-written for a contest.
-Rainwalker a.k.a. Laura.
-picture provide by contest holder: bella-babie
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture prompt; 10 entries, I NEED 3 MORE PLEASE ENTER!! by perfectsunset.
380 points, ended May 6, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments? Constructive criticisms? Is the rhyme working? Does the last stanza fit? The last line?
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Such talent for one so young
Don't forget your sun block. I like one with aloe vera in it. I'm 63 years old. Believe me, you have a long time in which to become the world's greatest poet.
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I like this very much. Congratulations on the little brown jug.
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As I've said elsewhere, I love poems which create images, and this one certainly does. The last line, to my mind, is perfect, as it makes the poem taper off, rather than come to an abrupt end.
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This was such a beautiful write so full of imagery and greatly collaborated thoughts. I really enjoy the meaning and depth of this as well. Loved these lines
"Then Winter steps up,
snow falling from dark hair.
Stiff legs growing white frost
as cold steals the night air."
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Just a FYI I updated/changed the fourth stanza of this piece today (4/30) And thank you for the lovely comment!
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