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Air Sickness Bag

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Sitting next to you on that airplane?
Could only be compared with being cooked alive
by pygmies with no salt, or culinary etiquette.
And when you started comparatively analyzing yourself
to models in magazines? Was right about the time when
I asked for a pillow, and a blanket.

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Written December 16th, 2003

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A contest entry

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  • eclipsedfloyd
    April 9, 2006
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    Nice chicks. And good job.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 7, 2006
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    Think the picture won you the contest ! LOL Great cold winner here - Congratulations. How true this is.


  • layla.
    April 2, 2006
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    ooo


  • der atlas
    September 3, 2005
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    I love this. Perfect for the contest, great wit and lovely use of brevity and vocabulary as weapons! Love it.


  • Imokon
    May 1, 2005
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    That's a cute poem. Keep up the satire.

  • The Bong-Diggety
    May 1, 2005
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    Well... I don't know quite what to say about this one. I really like the originality of it. I think we've all felt that way once or twice in our lives.Great job!

  • I heart you
    May 1, 2005
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    awesome though..


  • MaaiL
    May 1, 2005
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    Very nice dude ! Keep up the good work !!

  • empire of dirt
    March 16, 2005
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    I recently flew for the first time. You brought back my BIGGEST fear, not being able to get away. THANKS A LOT. Just kidding, Nice write, excuse me while I gasp for air..ugh!


  • fotofroggy
    January 9, 2005
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    ooh ouch! this is great! i can totally relate to being stuck next to someone who's mindless babbling makes my skin crawl.


  • Dave Adam silver member
    December 16, 2004
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    BUT DON'T YOU LOVE IT WHEN THEY TRY TO GET YOUR ATTENTION AGAIN BY DROPPING SOMETHING IN YOUR LAP. Then you have to pretend you are sleeping as they trace the surface of your Dockers in a search for the missing nuts. Nice that the 1st class seats are wide and come with blankets. Redeye, purple people pleaser called into duty for yet another in a series of Mile-high explorations vol.5

    So much hot action under the fleece
    even the flight attendant slips over
    for a little under-the- skirt in the aisle
    incidental contact
    all at 38,ooo ft.
    and climbing

    Sucks to be a slave
    to airborne
    distractions

    all to be civil
    to silence her ramblings.


  • onerios13
    November 5, 2004
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    LOL...dude, that totally cracks my shit UP! lol I loved it! Can't tell you how many times I've been faced with the same situation as I'm always traveling...lol. So this was not only halarious, but SOOOO identifiable, lol. Damn, that was too rich!


  • dusted
    October 27, 2004
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    Heh heh I really liked this. My dad's always getting stuck next to people like that on aeroplanes... or are they stuck next to my dad?

    Great descriptions, thanks for entering

  • kittykatie79
    October 26, 2004
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    great one

    this is good i hate too when you have to smell someone that needs help with a bad smell, i like this

  • Karen Michelle
    September 17, 2004
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    Hehe, loved the line(s);
    'pygmies with no salt,
    or culinary etiquette.' - that description is just excellent! A brilliant write - I also like the way it ends. Well done.


  • glazecovered
    April 10, 2004
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    Now this was interesting... You captured the feeling of being bored to tears and irritated very well. I enjoyed this, partly because I've definitely felt like this before Thank you for entering and good luck.
    ~Anastasia


  • Jenna3377
    December 26, 2003
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    lol another good one
    good job
    an good luck
    ~Jen~


  • Manicmuze
    December 17, 2003
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    LOL, I think i'd have asked for a pillow too. This is tight, you've captured the moment and the boredom and frustration of having to be that close to this person.

    Another impressive write, a pleasure,
    ~ Wendy


  • generic
    December 17, 2003
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    haha, i loved this...great stuff...
    being cooked alive
    by pygmies with no salt,
    or culinary etiquette.

    ...awesome description, wish i could have thought of it. i know some people who would make me feel like that if i had to sit next to them for any length of time

    well done, and i loved the ending as well.


  • astralshepherd gold member
    December 16, 2003
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    good imagery and a good dose of reality. thank you for sharing this poem and thanks for letting me comment on it. ~richard
    BTW, thanks for your comment on "threads" as well.


  • December 16, 2003
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    LOL .. harsh .. but there is something cyinically beatiful in curt truthfulness.


  • poetryality silver member
    December 16, 2003
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    Wow! I guess you really got bored with the conversation, huh?
    This was great. Lots of imagery with few words always makes me smile. Love the line; "...being cooked alive by pygmies with no salt or culinary etiquette", what a sight! Keep sharing!

    Thanks for the "just" word suggestion. I used it. Don't understand the goodie, goodie part but, because poetry is subjective, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. Thanks for reading and commenting.

    Much Love,
    Renee

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