we were both about to be out of the military
but Uncle Sam had other ideas about you
Uncle Sam decided our time together was through
he decided it was time for you to deploy again
which means I am sitting here in Texas all alone
while you are training once more to be a engineer patrolmen
as I lay here all alone I can't help but stretch out my hand
to where you just used to lay your head next to me on my bed
but instead I only feel the telephone
yeah I always have it besides me in-case you call while I am in bed
you have a little while longer in Fort Polk before you leave once more
phones ringing, finally it is your voice I hear,
you say you will be home soon for one last time before you deploy
I choke as I hear you say "good night, my dear"
I know there will come a time when I won't even get that
and my heart will feel as if you have disappeared
the longer you are gone the lonelier I feel
I wish I didn't understand why you volunteered
our friends are way too good to me
don't fear I will never you betray
they take me out partying every-night
no matter how far apart or how long your away
I will always be here for you no matter what
they just don't want me going crazy with memories of you
they don't like to see me crying cause your not here
they just want to see me happy instead of blue
I will always be your faithful small town country girl
who enjoys playing with fire as much as you do
who likes to play with guns and blow things up too
baby come back home to me I dearly miss you
Author notes
my boyfriend got stop losed..so he is now currently deployed to iraq
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I can not imagine what it would be like to having the one I love sent to Iraq.
such a heartfelt write.
thank you so much for entering,
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this was a very moving poem to read - i don't have any connections to the military, but having read so many entries in this contest, let alone on the site and in books -
and i can't even begin to imagine how hard it must be for you to have your boyfriend taken so far away ...
"I will always be your faithful small town country girl" <-- thought that that was really well worded, and so ... honest to ones self.
however, there was on section that disturbed me a little;
"who likes to play with guns and blow things up too"
it just seems a little .. insensitive or something
thanks for entering
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the part you think is insensitive is because i served in the military as well...and if you saw us just playing around...we like to blow bottles up with firecrackers and go to the shooting range and go hunting...
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Ah, I gathered that you might have alright - I think it just hit me because so many soldiers get injured from 'friendly fire' and what that, that to say "who likes to play with guns" it just sounded ... disturbing .. if you can try to look at it from a neutral point of view?
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This is a really touching poem..
The emotion in this was really heartfelt..
And you created a very vivid image..
I hope that everything gets better for you..
Just stay strong.. I'm sure that with your strong coutry girl heart you'll be able to hold out.. thats what we country girls are good at..
Thank you for sharing this..
Best of luck..
Angel
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Aww hun I know it's hard I have family in the military. And it's always hard watching them go. My cousin especially he means the world to me and watching him leave is horrible. He was based in fort hood, and was a sgt, and tanker. He lives in Georgia now. But he's been over seas seven times now. I know how it feels but sometimes all it takes is being a faithful small town country girl. Besides here in Texas its what we do best.
Love always
Stormy
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Very good and touching. While not really thy type of poem I was looking for in my contest I still really enjoyed it. I wish your boyfriend good luck and I hope he returns to you soon.
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awww this is sweet and the flow was perfect
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This is very painful and sweet.. what a story is yours to tell. I admire your loyalty; your love must be rather strong. Very nicely done.. I liked it. Thanks for entering.
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awwwwwww I'm sorry girlie but be strong and if u ever need 2 talk I'm here for u. I know it's rough but hopefully it will come to an end with you two holding each other in bed once again.
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Can't even come close
to feeling your indescribable pain. Separation, like that, has gotta hurt. I hope that you see your way through your pain and become a source in what he endures. -
Aww,dang...this is sad...truly unbelievable...
You're so strong and really stand your ground when it comes to such times as these,I believe... -
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does it need any work done to it that you can see..
..he hasnt left yet..im not sure when he leaves but his unit deploys around oct. but he has only been told hes going with them by his commander callin him to warn him that he had orders in the mail..so i still have him next to me at the moment..
for a lil while longer..anyway
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