As dusk fills the air with the sweet stench of warm blood,
I open my eyes to the darkness that is my life.
In silence I glide unseeming to move at all,
unnoticed in the moonlight; Brushed off
as a cold chill or breeze.
Again I find my self at your window watching,
waiting...Longing.... for what?
I'm not sure.
Maybe a glimpse of your Beauty once more;
soft, warm flesh that I can no longer hold....
Lips that Can never be kissed without impending death
or this eternal curse that i've been given.
Some would call this a gift;
have they ever known true mortal love,
Maybe?
Regret, I can still feel the pain in my cold dead heart;
I'll never make you choose.
As again the tears of blood stream down my white ashen face,
the only thing i can feel now is immense hunger;
I must feed.....
Before the dawn burns away my beastly existance.
Like a wolf stalking its prey I wait,
wondering if I can kill; yet I must.
There- A young girl alone in the night,one more moment &.....
NO! Can't do it, the zoo will once again suffice.
Do I have to be cursed with a conscience;
Along with my humanity why couldn't I have lost that too?
I almost wish someone would find me,
I welcome true death, but lack the courage to stand
& meet the sunrise,
Do I still have a soul?
Knowing that someday I will have to see your mortality end;
I am damned to watch this world go on, for eternity.
Dawn approaches.
I must return to my grave;
The only thing I fear is the looming unkown,
my future.
I close the lid on my coffin & close my eyes,
knowing I will dream of making love to you once more.
Maybe tomarrow I will forget; Tomarrow Maybe I will feast.
Maybe.............
But for tonight,
I will again fly through vampire nightmares
and forever
say goodbye to my sunrise...................
Author notes
Anne Rice * Rocks!!!
The vampire chronicles is my favorite book series....
So I dedicate this tale to Louis,(did I spell that right?)
who stole my heart.
A contest entry
- A Vampires True Heart by Raven Of Death.
464 points, ended May 13, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh, and applause.
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Very powerful piece indeed. For the most part, the imagery here is fantastic. If it were me personally, I'd tweak the lines "I open my eyes to the darkness that is my life" and "As again the tears of blood stream down my white ashen face" ever so slightly. They just feel a little cilched to me, and I myself would try to find slightly different wording to give the piece a more unique approach. However, they do fit the context of this piece perfectly and are executed quite well, so I wouldn't necessarily recommend a change if you're happy with them.
The early parts of this piece remind me of a couple of lines from the song "The Nurse Who Loved Me" by A Perfect Circle:
"Say hello to everything you've left behind.
It's even more a part of your life now that you can't touch it."
As for the later themes of growing tired and wanting to give up, I've been a cancer patient for 7 years now. I understand that feeling all too well and I think you captured it nicely here. Very well done. -
I really enjoyed reading this poem you have written. The way you took her book & made it in to your own words was AWESOME! You worked it. A true vampire love story. Of the pain that her soul desires, her one true love that has been taking away from her for eternity. Only seeing him in her dreams aching for him, not wanting to be there without him. I was so drawn it to every word here. I bow to you for having me go there! Congratulations on the gold well deserved! In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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lovely!
i loved it, and i love Anne Rice, i also know of another good book involving Vampires, 'twilight and 'new moon' which i am currently reading, keep up the good work! -
A truly dark write here. This is written well and I congratulate you on winning the gold trophy. Nice job! Blessings, Patty
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Very good!
Love the way you wrote this poem!! WOnderful job. Keep writing i enjoy your work! -
Not really into the vampie genre, but as it goes it's a well written poem. Content full of dramatic tension contrasted by a summoning of sympathy due to the hesitancy and questioning
'Do I still have a soul?'
Good ending, the tension held by the uncertainty of the outcome.
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This is amazing! I am completely left speechless. =)
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fantastic and well worthy fo gold well done
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nice job!!!
sorry I saw your message at last. It was beautiful and yes I have read this before.The title sparked my intrest. Good job a gold trophy trulty diserved.
~OG
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its good im sure youll do well in the contest
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