I feel myself falling away and there's nothing I can do
there's no one who can help me, there's nothing to hold onto
I've seen this coming for a while now and I thought I could erase it
but now that I'm slipping down I know I was only post-poning this
I feel so scared because I know about whats to come
I wasn't always the one that was falling, once I was the watching one
I watched in confusion as he threw his life away
binge drinking every weekend, throwing his friends into dismay
I'm sorry everyone, I love you and I wish you'd understand
I wish that you could see past the exterior to my outstretched hand
If only you could help me, pull me out of this mess
that would just be so easy, it would keep me from distress
but there's nothing anyone can do, I've heard every sermon
and still I turn away, it seems my fate has been determined
I don't know how this ends but the beginning was nice
wherever i am now is a spiral, and my heart has turned to ice
I wish I could tell you that everything will turn out fine
but it seems like everything I do makes me more and more confined
I don't know if I'll make it out of here as my heart builds up these walls
but if I'm here for all eternity, listen for my silent calls
Author notes
I've been on AP for about 6 months, username is jesusfan01, I'm 17, and I'm on AP every weekday in my spares which adds up to a total of about 160 minutes/day
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This is a great poem. (well not what its about, but the way you wrote it). Sometimes we have low points in our life when we turn away from God, but really those are the times when we need him the most. We've all felt this way or will at some point, so you are not alone.
The rhyme was great on this poem. It made it flow very nicely. You have some grammatical errors, like in the last line of the fourth stanza. But otherwise, very nice poem!
Keep on writing,
~ Bright Smyles
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a good dark piece full of sighs that twist the spirit, i think we all feel like this at times.
the poem you just commented on, it is not a personal poem, it is just a poem
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this is great.. healing isn't easy
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gosh darn...have you tried, asked them for help...matt jenni ryan..they will help you, you just have to ask...i know it sounds easier than it is...but you can do it!!!
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