Crash to the ground.
Orchestrations of glass laying mosaic over a tiled floor.
Lives in tatters.
Voices at pitch.
Mirror Shards.
Deadly jagged onlookers.
Silent witnesses to domestic strife,
at fever pitch.
A contest entry
- Shatter by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended April 30, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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nice
like the idea of a mirror as witness
even to domestic strife
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thanks mich ..alas my entry should have been uplifting , but it was despairful ,, boohoo xx
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Excellent take on the picture---very very well versed!!
Very well done and best of luck to you in the contest!
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thanks treasure,,i actually like this little poem myself best regards peter
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Oh, you have frozen a moment in these few lines...we know these, your readers...these moments of crash-down chaos. Thank you for entering.
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ive broken many a mirror in my life..and had lots of bad luck..but maybe now my luck will change..good luck in the contest..xxx
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thank you june , i will need it as usual,,, hugs xx
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Well I have threw a few fits in my time, then I learned the secret of patience, the beauty of life and the reason I did this was not my fault...Then at one point it was...so I sang a new tune,but broken shards are sharp and beautiful....nice write about squabbles....
novy
Turn about is fair play
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thanks novy , i havent broken any mirrors ,, seven years bad luck ,,
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another great piece written today deary. good luck with this in the ciontest
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ONE CAN OBTAIN MANY DIFFERENT OPTIONS, FROM THIS WRITE..HOWEVER, I LIKE IT, AND IT IS WELL-WRITTEN..IT REMINDS ME OF SOMEONE "SMASHING" SOMETHING ON THE FLOOR,&@THE SAME TIME,A LIFE FILLED WITH YELLING AND MUCH UN-HAPPINESS...GOOD WRITE THOUGH..."GOD BLESS". GOOD LUCK IN YOUR CONTEST!! LOVE, SHIRLEY SHAW.
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