The telephone just sits and looks at you
As you pretend your day is going well
You look around for other things to do
To keep your mind from sinking into hell
The postman walks straight past and doesn't call
No letters crash to Earth upon the mat
Your email inbox hardly grows at all
And only then with pills to fight your fat
The sweetest sound that you have heard all day
You grab the phone and press it to your ear
Her loving voice will chase the blues away
And for a while the two of you sit near
Each hour you are apart the world grows cold
But every moment's contact's made from gold
In a list
A contest entry
- Long Distance Love by SomeonesToySoldier.
500 points, ended May 9, 2008, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this poem is really good i like the flow and i like how it is about you waiting and missing her, keep up the great writing congradulations on the bronze, -Amy
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Very good. know the feeling of sitting by the phone well waiting for it to reaing and hear that sweet voice on the other end that seems to make the day perfect. Your rythm and rhyme in the poem are exceptional and the imagry is outstanding really good poem and thanks for entering it in my contest.
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You've penned my thoughts and I can relate to them well, long distance love is the toughest kind of love I think there is.
All the best in the contest...
Love
Sue
xx
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Now we are in the days of email and SMS, looking at chat servers and mobile screens, makes you wonder what did we do before technology took over?
Oh the joys of love. Nice bean perfick write Jeff xxx
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I have been trying to call someone I adore for about three days, and so far I haven't got any answer bar her voicemail. The boot can be on the other foot.
This is a nifty and pignant sonnet (not often you get those two adjectives together!)
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A long distant love is better than no love at all. Been there abd dine that. Now th ephone brings the troubles and worries of others. I am not a guardian angel. There are the sales pitch, if I speak to a person; I play with their brains. For piece and quiet there is the "silent ring" button. Then ther eis peace and wife and I are in gold. A delightful read. Thanks.
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A long distant love is better than no love at all. Been there abd dine that. Now th ephone brings the troubles and worries of others. I am not a guardian angel. There are the sales pitch, if I speak to a person; I play with their brains. For piece and quiet there is the "silent ring" button. Then ther eis peace and wife and I are in gold. A delightful read. Thanks.
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and here my phone never stops ringing...
life is just so busy all the time...
thank you for the read today/tonight
whatever it is there where you are...
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wonderful.. i know what is the telephone just sits and looks at you.. that's my phone..
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