Slivers slip away.
Each day seems to take its toll
and pain lies pulsating as I sleep.
Perhaps that is the reason for dreams-
to have a place to breathe again
when sorrow suffocates.
So difficult to smile
when fragments of your heart
fall like petals in a garden
but hope shines its light
even in darkness,
never allowing the spirit to wilt.
♥
Author notes
Shatter
Free Verse write something fresh and new from the far edge of this prompt
A contest entry
- Shatter by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended April 30, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This piece starts sullen, shattered, and left to the winds... Leading to an eventual hope beyond, a search for soul's repair. I loved this. There is so much emotion here that makes me think, something that I can relate to more than you even know. Beautiful!!!!
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Very Impressive
one of the very rare ultra cool free writes I have ever read of yours. I really liked the depth quality and well the over all finesse you place dinto this poem and really loved how well you penned it and the way it was worded. any ways the prompt was cool & I like you take on it. keep up the good work n good luck =)
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Sigh~ even in darkness your pen shines hope...
such a emotional piece you have written with beautiful imagery that touches the heart..
Lovely my sweet sister
Jazzy
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Nice imagery in this poem....and I love
"Perhaps that is the reason for dreams-
to have a place to breathe again
when sorrow suffocates."
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definitely a step outside my dear cousin. I am used to reading poems about softness and love from you, but this is a gritty and dark piece with much substance and still somehow retains the essence of your style. Very well done and best wishes for the contest.
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beautiful poem..."when fragments of the heart"... fall like petals...so many of us can relate to this...so very well done...PK
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Thanks Sis,
I needed this, for my spirit feels like it is wilting as I type this piece for many reasons. I've had a bad week, let alone a peachy keen life.
But thanks for sharing.. Love your poetry and you! 
-Bro Timothy
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Lynda,
Yes, you have nailed it. Our dreams are our refuge, our escape from the waking life. It is there that we can work out those things that bother us to give us comfort and strength the meet the challenges we face each day.
Well written as usual. You definitely have a grasp on this. Take care and keep the ink flowing. Good luck!
~Donna~
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Oh My!!
Now this tugs at the Heartstrings
Beautifully penned though sad to inhale...
yet needing to be said
Dreams are a place of refuge...without them...
we would be stuck in the Stone Age~
without the safety net-aka comfort zone...
trying to spear clouds...
Love this!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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May all your dreams awaken the light of love and healing. Beautifully whispered, Lynda.
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Brilliant
This is Brilliant and yes i do believe that dreams are there to escape the sorrow and pain we suffer whilst awake great poem best wishes Brian.
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