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Shattered



I threw my shoe at you in anger
it missed
shattering the mirror
it was the one we bought in Venice
before we started hating
now strewn upon the floor
a thousand pieces
shattered.














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  • isabelwk
    May 2
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    Brrrr!

    How wonderfully dramatic. Love the line "before we started hating".


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    April 30

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    This has some great potential.... in peotry, it is best to leave the ending and the obvious to the reader...editing the last two lines allows the reader to know without being told. thank you for entering this..I have thrown a few shoes myself...lol

  • PinkPony
    April 30
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    This is rather beautiful and also very smart and clever... images that show fine drama.


  • Jonathan Wikkins
    April 29

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    wow hilly, you've outdone yourself on this one...
    it's so painful, been there, done that...
    good luck in the contest!

    mike, aka jonathan wikkins