I threw my shoe at you in anger
it missed
shattering the mirror
it was the one we bought in Venice
before we started hating
now strewn upon the floor
a thousand pieces
shattered.
A contest entry
- Shatter by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended April 30, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Two Year Celebration by Kari.
1800 points, ended June 9, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Brrrr!
How wonderfully dramatic. Love the line "before we started hating".
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This has some great potential.... in peotry, it is best to leave the ending and the obvious to the reader...editing the last two lines allows the reader to know without being told. thank you for entering this..I have thrown a few shoes myself...lol
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This is rather beautiful and also very smart and clever... images that show fine drama.
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wow hilly, you've outdone yourself on this one...
it's so painful, been there, done that...
good luck in the contest!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins
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