Saccharine smile
no longer sported,
diabetic
Author notes
Senryu
A contest entry
- How Witty Can You Be? by femurlee.
1000 points, ended May 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended May 26, 2008, 179 entries
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This is a very interest take on you disease, but I love that you still have your sense of humor.
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Yeah, I guess it all depends on one's perspective
Thank you!
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Very Clever
A fellow diabetic eh? So am I. It runs in my family. My grandmother said I was just too sweet for my own good. (I think she was exaggerating a little.)
But bravo on such a clever piece. It takes real skill to squeeze that much thought into so few words. The work of a master. Write on, poet.
-Niur Tarow.
...and thank you for your wonderful comment on Venus Revisited. It meant a lot to me.
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oh i hate that sugar substitute, it is like putting grass in your tea and sying lovely mmm lol here have a full sugar smile
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Excellent!
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Saccharine sucks... I can tell because my dad is diabetic and I used to try it, but it sincerely sucks. I'm glad I don't need it since my health is awesome. Nice compression of the idea, although it's still difficult for me to grasp it.
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