A Break Up Song

I'm sorry that I hurt you,
things weren't supposed to end this way.
You've forgotten all your pride
and I've lost my memorised lines.
This was supposed to make us happy
, well I thought that in my mind
and now the look you give me
it's something I must live with
everyday.

And all the pain I put you through
chasing after these dreams. All the
frustration overcame you, and never would
I listen. I think we could have made it
through, but I gave up long ago. These years
I wish that I could take it all away.
Maybe if you'd never met me,
you'd never have met this pain.

The romance I want to give you,
if permission to be free. Find someone
to love you, someone so unlike me.
She'll make you ever happy and
not let you down,
and be the one who catches
all your tears.

Author notes

Quoted parts of The Reason by Hoobastank. Original Lyrics: I'm sorry that I hurt you
It's something I must live with everyday
And all the pain I put you through
I wish that I could take it all away
And be the one who catches all your tears

But if you know the song you can see I've perhaps twisted the meaning a little to a different intepretation.

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  • RainbowGirl257
    May 2
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    i do like the way you have interpreted the song. in the last stanza, i liked the rhyme between lines 2 and 3, although looking at the rest of the poem, it doesn't rhyme, so i dont think that was deliberate. You should try rhyming more of your poems, you're good at it. thanks for entering and good luck.