Lines upon my skin

Those pen ink lines upon my
skin, are not a form of threat.
They're the mark left from
that old cliche, broken heart.
My eyes were blocked with
uncried tears, so with my vision blurred
I tried for comfort in a glass,
and when it shattered, a million pieces
the pattern appeared like my reflection.
I drew this shape to remind me
how tragic that night could've been.

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    April 30

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    thank you for entering...a couple of things, though
    I do not agree with promoting this type of activity for our younger readers to read.... it is not a promotion that I feel poetry entered in any of my contests should go to. Yes, we suffer, but I do not want to be part of promoting unhealthy ways of dealing with life just because it seems to be the in thing. Please do not enter such in my contests. I do appreciate hard things as lessons but not this type of unhealthy response to it.
    • Sarahs Chanson
      May 1
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      Well I'm sorry you felt that way, but I do feel you may have missed the intention of the poem. It's about remembering bad things that happen in life and learning from them, hence the last line mentioning how tragic that night "could have been", i.e people do extreme things when they feel broken. Hence a reminder, physical like a tattoo (just an example of "pen lines") or figurative like a memory, can be a reminder of the past and a way to move on and deal with it. I wasn't suggesting any 'cutting' or rash responses were the solution to the issue. I'm sorry you felt differently about the poem.