Sink your teeth into my decayed heart,
Shred it to pieces, slice it in half,
Acidify my blood, poison my soul,
You might as well since I’m not even whole.
Burn me like a candle, inflict on all this pain,
Take my heart for a ride, cause it some strain,
All I have left, you might as well destroy,
As making me suffer is all you enjoy.
But if that means that you’ll still be with me here,
Then rip away baby but don’t drown in my tears,
It may seem crazy me wanting to hurt,
But being with you is a heavenly dessert.
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Woww...I can really feel the emotion in this. I love the imagery. Good luck in the contest
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Ouch!
A heart wrenching piece written with great imagery and emotion. Good luck in the contest hun x -
Really nice flow. Such a sad tale, but so true in love alot of the time. Bravo!
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i like this poem alot!! it made me cry well done
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wow. 'Then rip away baby but don’t drown in my tears'. fantastic! To love someone so much that even though they hurt you, you still want them to be yours. Very well done.
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i love the depth you have used in this poem and the pain i can feel from reading your words, i like the way you say that you have a decayed heart and the way that you crave being together even with the pain,
Keep up the writing
ɛiɜ ~Amy
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This is an awesome poem. It kinda made me cry cause i just literally wrote sometihing pertaining to this. So it def hits deep. Such strong words at a young age it reminds me of myself. Excellent poem.!! I would not change a thing about it i love the whole thing.
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I liked it! The rhyme works so well and i just love the way you finish it with that line.
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Nice write, I enjoyed the rhyme!
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