As the leaves turn
scarlet, gold
wintry weather calms
my summer soul.
Smells of homemade
stews, hot rolls
Grandma chased
my blues away.
With him went my
heart scurrying alone;
my snow-storms showed
me the way home.
Author notes
basic metaphor...free verse preferred
This man was a blizzard in her life....
A contest entry
- Langston Hughes - quick contest by Peteskid.
1200 points, ended May 5, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent
what a wonderful creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Some wonderful ideas put down here. I think you have incorporated so much that will connect with your readers. A good story telling of her relationship in such brevity. Well done.
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A frozen heart is hard to deal, with but must be done at times. The love of others, especially family, can help melt the ice away; it is not perma-frost.
Loved the pic, reminds me of an old song called "Waitin' for a Train".
Good job, my Dove, I hope you do well in the contest.
I love you,
Brazos
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i liked this write..good luck in the contest..xxx
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mmm tasty like a fine wine best when cold... i aint got a clue what i mean.. unlike you who has said so much in this wonderful peice of poetry this is worth gold in any bodys eyes your right simple it is but packs a punch its beautiful simpified poetry at its best... mean bit now lol i have to say i hate the title but i can see why you used it, great stuff and the best of luck in the contest
john
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Nice!!
Hia, very great!! I'm sin if you havent checked me out yet, please do so... if you have the time much love -Sin -
A plesent write very nostalgic.You should go far with your work. It is not a three but a good strong two. Thank you for sharing.
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This has some wonderful moments, sadness away from home and coming home to warmth and love... few things in life mean more, and sometimes sadness is best left behind...positive uplifting ideas here, holding to the dreams, making life beautiful. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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