Waiting,
weary
and sweat stained
nervously
chewing
nails
.
.
and
.
.
.
still
.
.
.
waiting
in
vain;
watching
with horrendous fascination
life
.
.
.
drain
.
.
away...
Author notes
Vivas !
A contest entry
- Contest of the Shorts! by Shahrazad.
450 points, ended May 6, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"watching with horrendous fascination" So dark and wonderfully worded... I reread those words a few times- they really stuck with me. This was really interesting- you gave the readers a lot to think about.
thanks for entering the contest! -
WOW, simplistic meets suspenseful!
This was really good. Everything FELL into place. Oh and the background, those little mini skulls. Yeah, those would usually be pretty campy, but it worked for this one.
good job!
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WOW---Very Intense and well-written!
Well Done & Best of Luck in the Contest!
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