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Pharmacist

I felt no joy that day i rolled
into your working place,
"Rolled" is the perfect word to use
for i was crippled at the time,
I do not even try to muse why it is
your face brought a smile to mine
                                But it did.

My dreams were taken by a fault
all loves i once had were destroyed,
No longer were my legs a vision of grace
upon a hardwood floor,
Yet now i crave more of that special smile
the one that only you can bring.
                                I don't know why.

Gone are my thoughts of depression and angst
which i had so long endured,
Gone are the dreams that i once had
of a dancer in disorganised form,
I don't understand and no longer try
why all i crave is that special smile.
                                And i don't care.

Author notes

Well i had to be careful keeping this poem off the topic of drugs, which is easily explained.
I recently tore two ligaments in my knee and have been in a wheelchair for a while up until about a week ago.
I was put on Morpheine tablets and had to refill a prescription every 6 days. The pharmacist everytime i went in there would without fail make me smile.
I am on stronger pain killers now so that i can do exercises before having a knee replacement and i swear i have fallen in love with this pharmacist.
For the last 3 months i have endured this (losing my dream of dancing) and the only thing i have looked forward to is seeing my pharmacist when i pick up my prexcription. I would love to think that he shares my feelings but i seriously doubt it.

Anyway thats the long back story of the piece over with. I hope you enjoy the piece i don't think i've written a free verse before i usually end up with a form that rhymes.

Well hope you enjoy.
xoxo

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Very well done

    I am very sorry about your pain and the not being able to be a dancer but I think you should talk with the man and know for sure one way or another . You will never know otherwise and goodluck


  • ellipsist
    May 6, 2008

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    I know what appeals to me so much about this - it is the final line of each stanza (because I am self centered and because each speaks to ME personally) it almost reads like a piece itself "but it did. I don't know why. And i don't care."

    effin' love that!


    • Yunalonei
      June 16, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you so much for the gold trophy in your contest. I'm not to sure if i've already said that but ive been sick for a while so i wasnt sure if i had and thought i had better : )
      Im glad you enjoyed my poem your contest definately jabbed my creative nature with a cattle prod, i enjoyed writing the poem immensly and consider it to be in my top list (which isnt very many)

      Well thank you again and please let me know next contest you are hosting so that i can check it out.
      xoxo

  • ellipsist
    May 2, 2008
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    I like it and am impressed with the amount of effort that obviously must have gone into it and the attention that you paid to my stipulations, but feel I must re-visit in order to provide an insightful comment upon the piece itself...