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Fresh water,
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  l
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Creating;
Life and Beauty.

Spring; Here, just for now.

Author notes

This is a Haiku on spring. It may not look like a haiku, but it is in 5-7-5. Just in a different way.
The idea for the crazy way I wrote 'falling' is it is supposed to be like falling raindrops.
Fresh water is supposed to be the clouds.

Mistakes? Improvements that need to be made? Tips and tricks? I'd like some advice please.

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  • TabbyJoy
    April 29, 2008
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    This is really neat. Reminds me of some of my mother's form poetry. Like it.