The wind was here
It has left it's track
Love was here
It has dropped its tear
The sky has cried
So the rivers flow
Beauty was here
It has touched the flowers
And there is no man
To diminish it all
A contest entry
- Say something by HellRaiser21.
600 points, ended May 4, 2008, 10 entries
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What do you think
Comments
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Very nice. It flows smoothly, and my favorite lines are the third and fourth ones. Very good work.
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aw this is beautiful!
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it would be driped it blood, the word blood is to strong in this poem it's out of place, you could use tears. other then that it's very good for your age, well done
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Thanx
I have changed the line "It has dropped its blood" to "It has dropped its tear"
Thanx
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