He fell in love,
Hidden by darkness,
Pulling on her hood,
Kissing her dark lips,
He leaves - he's gone,
She holds his heart,
He's taken hers with him,
As they're torn apart,
She's a lover in this life,
He's a father in the other,
He'll be back,
For his baby's Mother.
A contest entry
- It's another SEMI-QUICKIE! (Pic Prompt) by Angelflower.
600 points, ended April 29, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOAH! just got this poem now... regret writing the other comment now and not being able to get the message.. well.. ahem.. bit slow
nice write tho
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oo very strong i love this piece
the flow, the tone and the theme
it started strong and ended even stronger.. brilliant piece
see ya
-Kas K Bubbles
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aww wow that is so beautiful.. short and so sweet.. it almost made me cry lol ^^ i love your writing so much you have a depth that not only do most PEOPLE not possess but certainly not most guys that i've met [no offense lol] this is absolutely beautiful.. your words, all of them i've ever read, reach a depth that i've never seen. ^^ wonderful
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yo your sweet,
thanks, thanks loads, i am glad that you like my writing.
thats cool that you think i write away from the normal males that write poetry, my stuff usually starts with emotions and i can only express myself through poetry...lol
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I see that you write abstract poetries with such ease..I am neither capable of writing any nor undertanding some...thankfully this one was quite easy on my brain(or so i think..lol)...i like what i read
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The rhyme is really amazing in this dom, good luck in el contesto... your using differnt styles now and they're really working for you!"
amazing...xxx
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Wow!! this was just so beautifully written! I love the imagery here.. and you make the prompt your own too! you have done such a wonderful job here! bravo!
Best of luck to you.
Jetleena
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