Consuming darkness, gradually eating
The pit of despair opens inviting
The gallows of death lay waiting
And willingly i'm drawn
A contest entry
- Contest of the Shorts! by Shahrazad.
450 points, ended May 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Fabulous imagery! I thought of the movie "The Princess Bride" with the pirate background and the pit of despair.
I was dying to know what the context of this situation was... I was left hanging. If you could find a way to clarify this a bit more, it would have a greater effect on the reader.
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taiinfinite
this i wrote for the reader to find their own context, as each reader im sure has walked a path with a swinging rope ahead. glad you were left hanging....mission accomplished, and thankyou for running the contest
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WOW--Very Intense---Well Done & Best of Luck in the Contest!
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taiinfinite
thankyou for your comment
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