The wind swept kisses
in solitude
recognize the distant aura
of falling matter
in atoms and molecules
all consistently evolving
whether love descends
or glimmers.
As one should touch me
know the side of us
and be the side of you
they would believe
the aderaline rush is true.
Our final ship
waited at the edge
falling to the vincity of belief.
After death
I did believe in you
me and us.
Author notes
PRompt:the picture..I took the perspective of death coming and reality about love dawning upon us. Its only when everything is ever we realise what we had.
A contest entry
- PIF/Picture Inspired by AliceinPoetryLand.
750 points, ended May 5, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
What a great creation. So deserving of the honorable mention. Congratulations
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Excellent take on the prompt! Great depth and meaning through your wonderful imagery. Thanks so mucxh for your entry
Gaylene
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thanks for the hm
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Nicely done. You take the imagery in some unexpected places, keeping your reader engaged. The opening image was particularly appealing emotionally, and i like how the other image of the ship falling off the edge of the world (marvelous, btw!) points back to the original. The conclusion is very nice. In the vast scope of the poetic thought here, the one simple pursuit should be the belief in love and in one another. Beautiful.
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Thanks!! Actually when i write in the area when u add the poem it looks fine but as soon as i click done...it becomes zig zag and annoying! Let me see what I can do!!
Thanks ever so much!!!
pri
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