Should his voice be far
from my needful ear,
oh wind, could your whisper;
mimic his sigh
with tender strokes
through my tresses?
Touch my heart,
if only for an instant
as I savor simple syllables
of loves lullaby
in borrowed breath.
♥♥
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Author notes
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/10392-Langston-Hughes-Dreams
and this is the theme of this quick contest, a simple metaphor extended to a further message; one that the writer might intend rather than something a reader might find...or even invent.
A contest entry
- Langston Hughes - quick contest by Peteskid.
1200 points, ended May 5, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a wonderfully flowing piece. An incredible sense of longing to travel heart to heart... Just beautiful!
Great write!!!
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not a half bad poem here and really like the depth flow & imagery place dinto this well penned well worded poem. any ways I ebilishly smile at the beautiful work you did here & say best of luck in the contest.
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I held my breath when reading this beautiful poem. There is one-ness of dream and yearning. A touch of metaphor and personification. I have this prayer that it will happen for you! Frans
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Beautiful!!
Oh the stories that can be told by the winds whispering their secrets
Another one to Love
The Elements gossip more than on Jerry Springer
just kidding
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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You have used beautiful imagery here and such soft, lilting phrases. Yes, to me, the wind most definitely can mimic his whisper, his touch... such a perfect comparison. "Borrowed breath..." ahhhhhh. Dreamy. Love the personification here.
As for us both writing on wind.... well, great minds....and romantic women . . . .
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How wonderfully beautiful this is
Sigh....
I loved every line of your poem, hon
Wishing you the very best of luck in this contest!
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How many times I have wished this very thing? But you know what I have learned, It is there, you just have to pay attention...
What a great read this one is! Just as beautiful as you, and your heart my friend!!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
Nyetta
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you speak with such softness about the true joys to be found amid loves embrace. great write and best wishes dear cousin
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Fantastic imagery, beautifully written. Best wishes and good luck to you in the contest.
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thank you for the lovely comment!
Lynda
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Gorgeous and wonderfully written!
It's great to read your work again
here my friend. Well done and all
the best to you in this contest.
Thanks a lot for sharing this one
with me and keep up the wonderful
work here!
Jeremy0826
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Excellent
This can only be said to be simply beautiful it is filled with the magic of romantic whispering great job all the best Brian.
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the whisper of the wind, a wonderful analogy of a wished for presence, the wind is a whisper bringing the essence of a memory, such a delicate image here...simply beautiful poetry. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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