The sparks of coyotes
are like lightning bolts
coming near your way as a storm,
more than just rain
which never comes down by itself
when full
As a friendly dog joins the group
unfittingly,
carrying her live umbrella
stretching out sound waves
all the way to our ears,
including a mile away of prairie wolves
from her bark held in her paw
she runs with
I notice it heavy
as puddles that aren't for me to walk in,
when wearing my favorite security,
I stay inside and listen
to the commotion {one right after another}
too fast for a puppy to control,
and yet it's her favorite thing
because opening the door kindly
is a party she turns her nose at
and trots in the country...
Feeling the same joyful job as she
with different tracks on the environment,
these certain yelpers
using a three-way echo scare,
tramping on the tin roof
with their nails in every way
similar to a nailing shower,
Just standing by
is all I can partake of a smile
Author notes
COYOTE
NOTE: this background was not made for me, i found it on google lol
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A contest entry
- Amazing Wild Animals (wild animals series 1 of 5 contests) by .
500 points, ended April 29, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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Surrealistic. I like that, especially the umbrella and the "bark held in her paw". Lost of energy happening here.
Good luck with it.
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I really enjoyed "coming...more than just rain, which never comes down by itself when full." What a beautiful comparison of the full gray clouds sliding from the mountain to rain in the valley and coyotes coming down only when they are NOT full.
Nice description of the dog joining the baying, and the sense of being surrounded ("mile away prarie wolves" and "three-way echo scare"). Great selection of background for this write!
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Very well done. Great imagery i this dear. Love the background it's pretty cool. Good luck in my Grans Contest.
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This is a wonderful write. I like the opening lines, they captivated and drew me in to the rest of the piece. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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Ooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! Awesome, oh yes!
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What a reaction!
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lol back. but, sorry i didn't clear up how i saw you might've also been between just a grin and a shriek...
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Kudos! You've captured the eeriness of the wild things that howl at the moon and send shivers down our spines and make us glad we're snug and safe in our cozy homes. Great work!
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Nice of you
Thank you, this is exactly what I was trying to go after, and I like your intense summary of my poem lol. You grasped my concept, showing your own personal detail how you fully read the poem.
Happily I have a smile not even barely leaning unfinished,
PIA-K
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