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Untouched

 
  Clinging...
          to existence

    drowning...
              in the whirlwind
                          of being

              ~braced~

        by the hand of God.

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  • Shahrazad
    May 5, 2008

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    I liked how you mixed up concrete imagery with really abstract ones such as "being" and "existance".... I loved the last lines... powerful. It really worked with a short poem like this. Thanks for the read!


  • eoz
    April 30, 2008
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    I Love This!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    April 29, 2008

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    Wow--A profound message within a minimum of words!!
    Very Very Well Done & Best of Luck in the Contest!