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Love Eviction

Love Eviction

By: The Red Cat Jazz of Love

 

 

Pulse races

 

Drops…..

 

Everything is dark,

 

At love 2:30 p.m.

 

Playing directions home,

 

But were do I live?

 

In the answers of suburbs

And agony

 

In the crammed efficiency

Of love failure eviction.

 

You have twenty four hours

 

To leave……

 

 

Julia L, Clark

 

 

© Julia L. Clark Registration Number TXu-331-190, All rights reserved

 

Author notes

Love Eviction / Windows of My Pain
Is actual a B G I made and finally found
Words To put to it.
yay! almost done with my second
suprise project

~ Lady Jazz ~

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  • Elizah
    August 6
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    I freaking love it(:!


  • Floatational
    April 23

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    Wonderful the way you put words and imagery together into feelings I am just in awe. Keep it up beautiful.


  • Diamond
    March 29

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    I' ve been a victim of loves eviction myself so I can relate to this piece. This was a very profound piece becuase we have all been there on time or another. Avril


  • secberm
    June 30, 2008

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    The Marshall's done posted that darned sticker on the front door and I know eyes are watching so I sneak in from the back, dig in the fridge for that last long neck to sip from. I know I don't belong here, but as long as I know the secrets to this old house, I'll always be around to haunt it. Write on. ONe.

    Dez


    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      June 30, 2008
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      nicebabe the answer was just marvelous dez i think you really did a grea job thanks for admiring this as well


  • toomysterious
    June 24, 2008

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    Direct and to the point with a eerie touch of heartbreak in there somewhere. I really connected with this.


  • Freestyle Bushido
    June 20, 2008
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    beautiful poem, it's like a mix of soul,hip-hop and haiku all at once.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    tenderly written and so revealing

    truly touching inside our souls!
    way to write!
    like what i'm reading, real confidence and stylings!
    such a feast to read a powerful poetess!
    ears/Seattle


  • Expat4Cebu
    June 5, 2008
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    Cries out to be spoken

    Nice piece. I can almost hear you reading it out loud.


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    May 29, 2008
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    Love it ma goes well with the BG.


  • Jamaica
    May 26, 2008
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    U know that's even better I love to learn more and ore about publishers. I'm only 18 and i been dying to publish my first one. The thing is I need at least 70 poets yo. So I went to allpoetry.com instead of writers-network.com were there r more real and talented poets like yourself that already have experience with publishing. It would help if u know n-e one else in your groups or fan club or if u just feel like o wut the heck I'll give it a shot. Let me know because right now u can give me more knowledge then i can give you.

  • Jamaica
    May 26, 2008

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    Wow this is fucking deep. I want to know if you always write fallen poetry were your thoughts just go down the line.


  • Ephiphany
    May 26, 2008

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    the Beautiful Dark

    your words are like the spark to any fire in Poetry. Striking poses as your gravy pours and explores the curves within my mind...great job as always.

    -

    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      May 26, 2008
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      thanks babe i love this poem piffy it is my absolute fav and i dont hve many that i wrote is my fav but this one is one of them its was so on the money thanks


  • darell
    May 24, 2008

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    Deep..

    baby this was deep. I love the emotional
    rollercoaster of feelings within this piece.
    I could almost imagine myself in that very
    space and time. It gave me a feeling of
    being all caught up. Nice work Julia

    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      May 24, 2008
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      thanks hon i like it to and the thing is when i penned it i wasn't even upset at all

      i guess i just can pull something out from anywhere and write


  • rose petal desires
    May 21, 2008

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    i love this aunt this was actually a very great poem i think it desrves a cup i really loved it

    • Jamaica
      May 26, 2008
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      Hey if you wnat to publish a book just send me your name and the name of other people you know who are interested. Allpoetry.com is entitled to the profit.


      • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
        May 26, 2008
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        nope that want work lol I have two publishers already for my first book and second book but thanks anyway hon


  • patsoldcat
    May 20, 2008
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    final edit

    as always a great write from one of my favorites.

    well metered and good feeling.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Like the words you weave here sweetie!
    Thanks for creating this beauty. Bravo..
    Had to come back and read how you laid it down. Great Job!

    -Timothy, aka King Mushy~


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    May 19, 2008

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    Wow! Powerful!

    I'm going through a major loss of sorts with a "friend" I thought I made & I feel kind of "evicted"! This conjures up many thoughts of loss on different levels. Its very evocative. Fine work. Great background & words to accompany. Unknown future, pensive, waiting. You're a talented "artiste"!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 17, 2008

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    Wonderful work here my friend!
    I love how you put this one
    together. Good luck to you
    with it and keep it up!




    Jeremy0826

    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      May 17, 2008
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      thanks J and I honestly think you admire this
      Piece because you commented why thank you I am flattered ~ chow ~

      Lady Jazz I like it to.


  • patsoldcat
    May 17, 2008
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    thanks


  • kennethlaney
    April 30, 2008
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    Good

    I like this one, I'd start with," As I gaze thru the window at my painful past".


  • Ephiphany
    April 29, 2008
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    LOVELY


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 29, 2008
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    So very creative, and moving!
    Well done Julia. -hugs-


  • ennovy silver member
    April 29, 2008

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    this one displays the drama of hiding. The feeling of one needing to be protected from the hard cruel world outside the comfort zone....excellent work here...novy


  • Jonathan Wikkins silver member
    April 29, 2008

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    do you mind if i use this one too?

    awesome job on it!

    you do good background!

    course, you do good erotic too!

    hehehehehehehehehe

    mike, aka jonathan wikkins

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