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Hand-Puppet

Suffocated,
     left breathless,

choked,
     by illusions

a hand-puppet,
     wearing stilled heart,
          on blood stained sleeve







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  • marlene47 silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    A strong image you've created here. I liked "choked,/by illusions/a hand puppet" and your subtle ending, yet not.
    Congratulations on the gold.
    Marlene


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    Fabulous imagery ~ such depth and power entwined within your words. Love this, love you, all the best, Lavender Butterfly.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 30, 2008

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    I see some of myself in this write!! Very well done indeed!!!


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    April 29, 2008

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    Oh, this is a beautiful write - leaves me feeling empty and lost as maybe she did. Great choice of words

  • phoenixonfire
    April 29, 2008

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    WOW! Thats some imagery i tell you There is so much power as well a mix of pain that comes splendidly!!!
    Loved it!!

    Thanks for entering!
    Good luck!
    pri


  • nilav
    April 29, 2008
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    powerful words .....

  • a u r a
    April 29, 2008

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    wow

    This poem hits you hard-it's depth gets to you-'Suffocated ,left breathless,choked,'-these words have the power to jump up from the text and amke the reader experience them-You have done excellent here but then you have always had a way with words emoting

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