She condemned him
he embraced destiny
as if shattering skies
could change us
~Pole Star~
Author notes
Pole star is the only star in the sky that does not change its place! The inital part is about being abandoned and the guy looking for the stars as things to be better for in life. But Pole Star condradicts his feelings.
A contest entry
- Surreal Illusion # 10 ~ Star Target by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended April 29, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i really like the descent of your lines. that visual really adds to the overall feel of the poem. great write and congratulations on bronze!
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Nicely creative and well written...truly wonderful and inviting...balance falls in the consistency of the Polar Star...congrat's on the trophy...
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This is fabulous... x
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