With little solace and release
I came to worship your love,
a visitor kneeling at the alter
of your heart’s chapel, a broken man
seeking salvation from just one smile.
For these nights and
this day I offer you
my repentance.
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In a list
A contest entry
- holy by Saffron.
700 points, ended May 11, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is very wonderful, and I wonder why you asked me not to consider it? Why wouldn't I consider it? It is lovely, concise and I think you know how I really like brief pieces that say so much. I also like your take on the contest prompt, and in stating what is holy to you.
Thank you so much for writing this and entering it into my contest. You should write more often, my friend.
Saffron
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What more could anyone ask for? Such a kind and heartfelt request for forgiveness! An amazing poet you are.
Az
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Yes, this is "holy" and sacred in such a soft voice, Scott. Lovely poetry.... so good to see you posting again, my friend. Strange how "just one smile" can bring salvation... I liked this.
~ Nicolette
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you always do a good job on these short concise and soulful descriptions of anguish.
nicely done
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Sighhh...This is such a sacred penning, my Friend. Good luck in the contest, Scribe.
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I see your pen is still so very kind to you, This is a beautiful write full of such wonderful imagery, sad....yet so beautiful.
Many blessings
~A~
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