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Time Never Ends [[A Triolet]]

Is the spider chasing arrows on the clock,
pulling them with its own silkened string tail?

Running only to mask the face of time-
is the spider chasing arrows. On the clock-

The bells chime, going faster and faster,
The time will fly, as another spider will try

(to catch)

The spider chasing arrows on the clock,
pulling them with its own silkened string tail.

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  • tiggercline
    April 29, 2008

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    Really interesting, and kind of odd. I actually loved that it's a triolet, I think you did a good job with it. Nice imagery as well.


  • TabbyJoy
    April 29, 2008

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    I didn't really get this...but it did have a nice flow and some vivid imagery. Spiders freak me out.
    "Running only to mask the face of time."
    my favorite line.