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Killing the Pain

Target acquired,
  crosshairs unwavering

smooth trigger action
  -quick bang-

overcame fear itself

          to leave you

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    April 29, 2008
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    Deeply engaging and immensely profound... x


  • m...c
    April 28, 2008
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    Well done.

    We always have our sight...somewhere else.


  • Nicada silver member
    April 28, 2008
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    A nice write in so few words. So many images here. This is a great poem. Thanks for sharing..Patty


  • aloveoncelost
    April 28, 2008
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    holy crackers so many images!!! this poem is so amazin'!!! keep on writing and dont stop


  • luna-midnight gold member
    April 28, 2008
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    aww wow, this is an aweosme look at the prompt
    great write and good luck
    take care
    stephanie


  • Danneh
    April 28, 2008

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    Wow... I must say I'm taken aghast by this poem, in it's simplicity it leaves such a shocking image that seems to echo within my head... Startling in it's truth, and in the situation it shows.

    -Danneh<3

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