The day I found Amazing grace
I was lost, nowhere to go
My Heart was torn apart
I had feelings of regret
That ripped my soul apart
That's when I found Amazing Grace
A light, a beacon, a welcomed friend
My life changed that day
I found a spark in my heart
A smile came to my face
A Feeling ran over me
It covered me with warmth
The day I found Amazing Grace
Amazing grace How sweet thou art
You save the wretch that's me
Author notes
It was suppost to be a poem, That could be about a women or the feeling of god in your presents, But I guess you can't mess with those types of things. Hope you like it.
Please tell me what you think
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Very Unique!
This is a great poem, I love the last two lines. This piece struck me as tenderly written, in all sincerity. Have you thought of entering this in a contest? Peace, Cyn 
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I take it that Grace, here, is something like the Will or Favor of God? In the first stanza, I think perhaps you could get rid of line 3, as it is somewhat redundant of line 5, and rhyming apart with itself is kind of kitschy anyway, then you could expound on line 5. What is the soul torn between? Pride and redemption? Sin and Grace? Earthly pleasures and the desire for eternal life? Or is it something more concrete, like drinking? As I understand it, Amazing Grace was originally written by a reformed Slave Ship Captain, so that's where it comes from. I don't see much point in writing a new take on Amazing Grace unless you're going to give it some specific personal spin. I might say as much for stanza two, as well. It seems like it could benefit from being a bit more specific.
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this is beautiful beyond words.
it's amazing how you could depict such a transformation in words.
to suddenly recognize the aesthetic value in all things.
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excellent
I like it very much. In the sense of the presence of God in one life there is nothing that can compare to the grace of his love once he is in our lives. In the sense that it is a woman she must be someone very special to have such an impact on one lifes. Beautiful write in the spiritual essence that is conveyed in the words.
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