Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Let's watch them try

Let them try
To watch us go by
In a whirl
A
f  l  a  s  h
more.

Let them try
To avert their eyes
From us
You know they can't.

Let's watch them try
We're so happy
They want to kill us
They're too
j  e  a  l  o  u  s

Let's watch them try.

Author notes

"Let them TRY to stop us." -The Golden Compass

Idk how this worked out...is it good or bad?

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • LuckyBlackCat
    April 30, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    oh yeah...this turned out really well. I loved it in fact. It wasn't the type of poem I had originally thought of for this quote..but it turned out even better!

    p.s. i know you're katie..


  • Danneh
    April 28, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I really liked this piece. your form is excellent, you have poetic expression in here, and! It's a beautiful theme that thankfully isn't over used. Nor is it depressing, so I love it right now.

    -Danneh<3