He’s held you closer than he ever held me,
Let forbidden words caress your instability,
Words never offered to me,
And I heard him tell you he loves you,
And for a moment any glimmer of contentment faded from my mind,
And a seed of pain appeared in my heart
And grew and grew till I thought it might burst,
And then I thought,
And then I laughed,
Because I remembered I have no feelings for him,
Remembered that he doesn’t know what love is,
So take his meaningless words,
His empty embrace,
I will find better
Or take none at all.
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I love the strength of resolve in this write...the title..."Take Him"...that in itself has such a sense of resolution! And I could not agree more with your sentiments...no use trying to build a fire with wet wood right? Who needs all the added woes of love that is not true? Brilliant write...I enjoyed every word!
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If someone you love,
doesn't really know what love is,
than I say take your love and walk away.
I enjoyed your poem.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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I hope you have not had to expirience this yet or hope that you will in the neer future. this poem is great but the feeling it coveys is aweful. I am sorry if you have!!
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oh, but it's such a wonderful feeling, being free of something you thought you were tied to. it can apply to any situation really.
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So you are saying that it is a good feeling when you see that someone who you were in a relationship (witch was not even sincere on their part by the looks of how they are acting now)go and leave you after using you.
Great Great. This whole "no feeling" thing is so fake. there is no such thing as having no feeling, maybe having no desire or no posative feeling for it, but you can never expirience no feeling unless you never knew it in the first place. Which obviously you have!
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I mean that say you thought that you depended on something (the situation in this poem is just one of the many instances to which this concept may apply) and then you realize, or decide that you are not. Freedom is bliss.
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Ok i understand. that was just not the imidiate meaning that I was conveying for this poem of yours
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so often people have felt this. it's truthful. a great element in any poem. i like how these emotions were penned. i can draw sympathy for the narrator.
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wow
good poem. i really like it. good job expressing how you feel about him.
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