It's the silence of night when my thoughts roam free,
reliving the moment that's sweet in my mind,
all conciousness focused on one memory;
of you; the one person to whom I'm not blind.
If you were to look into the depths of my eyes
as I've done yours, when you were unaware,
all you'd see reflected amongst starlit skies
is you; hanging ever immortal there.
If you were to walk through my dreams whilst I sleep
you would meet yourself; and with my fools hope me.
Once awake, despairing I hopelessly weep,
but I'll dry my tears, if you say you love me.
Author notes
If you have any suggestions for the last line, please tell me them, I'm not completely happy with it.
A contest entry
- My deepest Feelings of within by Abner.
600 points, ended May 5, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think, just don't make me want to hide under the bed.
Comments
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i know who thats about you sneaky divil!!!!
its an ok poem! wel done
xxx
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touching
If you were to walk through my dreams whilst I sleep
you would meet yourself; and with my fools hope me.
......its really touching ...keep on writing like this -
"If you were to look into the depths of my eyes
as I've done yours, when you were unaware",
this quote is outstanding i love it thanks u every much for entering
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