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Stand with Me

I walk in a sea of confusion, as I looked into your eyes.

Purl of sadness they are, as the wet storms come flashing down.

Softness, your hand let's go, as the steps echo away from me.

The images of my mind come clear, the years, the moments.

 

Disappear from all the time in this world. As you become a shadow lurking away from my heart.

I stand there shaking, cold and all alone. As my own lips say "Is this farewell?" I shook the thought.

 

But it was true, the mouths became the years.

My eyes, sorrow, loneliness and regret is all but left.

Hope was no more then just a word, with out any feeling.

 

I can still remember you with a soft passionate face.

 A smile of pure grace glowing from every moment of the night.

Your arms held me tight with gentle hands. Glowing with warmth from the fire place.

 

Hovering around my waist.

However, when my eyes alerted, and scanning the area..I was.

Alone..and nothing to keep me alive.

 

Here I am..As an old widow..looking for her last time.. To kiss the one she knew and the words he said, "Stand with Me."

Author notes

- I fixed this up, quite a lot...I hope all of you like this...After all I think this to be my thrid best mybe then again though, I love all of that I write.

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  • SerenityNChains gold member
    July 31, 2008
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    A wonderful and heartfelt entry. Thank you for penning and best of luck!

    Serenity


  • Angel
    June 26, 2008

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    Princess your a beautiful Poet

    This is so Beautiful..of love that was once...and may not come again...Princess this is Beautiful...thank you for writing this....Awwwwwwwww.


    • Cari Cullen
      June 26, 2008
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      Thank you for calling me princess =3

      • Angel
        June 27, 2008
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        Little Angel

        You are welcome Little Angel...God Bless.......Chris.


  • downed lover
    June 26, 2008
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    deap

    i can real realate to this and i think you do a wonderful job expressing the pain of loneliness


  • fairytalelovestory
    June 26, 2008

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    This is very pretty and so sad at the same time. I enjoyed every line. thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece.

  • fairytalelovestory
    June 19, 2008
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    This was very beautiful I enjoyed reading it.


  • Sir Squigglim
    May 21, 2008
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    nice job! its soft, sad, and touching....... this is really awsome


  • Sasukes1 girl
    May 7, 2008
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    Very nice, I liked it alot, good job!

  • WOW

    THIS ONE HAD ME SPEECHLESS...U REALLY OUT DID YOURSELF HERE!!!I COULD READ THIS OVER AND OVER!!


  • darkened light
    April 30, 2008
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    Aw. This is a very good poem. The whole thing seemed to be a memory, but yet present at the same time. It really made me feel the sadness of the girl in this poem. This write is definitely a reflection of an event that shook your heart. Amazing write. Great job.

    ~Darkened

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