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[your]self. [your]problem.

I feel like its that day again.

[your] turn to talk
break your [heart] loose,
as if it were still on fire
now covered in freezer burn

don't remind [your]self that you can bleed
blood still wont bring you back to [life]

nothing can bring you back to life
[your] soul still runs cold

I have no [warmth] to offer.

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Written December 16th, 2003

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  • QuothTheRaven
    December 27, 2003
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    AWESOME! That's all I can think right now, absolutely beautiful and really hinting. Wow, I love this poem, I am really glad that your author name caught my eye and so did this poem. Stellar write, keep it up!

    CarolyNRaveN


  • xforeverydeath
    December 20, 2003
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    "don't remind [your]self that you can bleed
    blood still wont bring you back to [life]"

    Nice.


  • Mooseman247
    December 16, 2003
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    [you're] on to something

    Remind me never to get on your bad side. Very Lyrical! Excellent stuff. Somehow you've used the age-old "heart" metaphor and made it seem real and gritty. Interesting. Keep up the good work!
    -Mooseman.