Jesus Christ is my lord and god
He is not a fraud
He loves us and show it
We only notice a little bit
But he did a lot for everyone
He sent his one and only son
To take our sins
So he loves us with all his heart
And I love him with all of mine.
A contest entry
- Write About The Supremacy Of Jesus Christ Over . . . by CurtimusMaximus.
575 points, ended May 12, 2008, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what u think.
Comments
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Nice Effort!
You addressed the title well, and identified well who Christ is. A little stylistic innaccuracy in stating that "He", in the context being Jesus, sent his one and only Son.
Work on the word lengths and rhyming patterns a little and send it to me again. Keep up the goiod work. -
Amen, full of truth short and sweet but to the point.
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