He measured mediocrity with portraits,
using body parts to make an image
and compared it to me.
It's when dreams are ascending
like platinium balloons that burst
with pressure from air,
that you'd realize what it's about;-
a sudden force of wind
to overthrow your balance
of organised chaos.
Detachment grew exponentially,
creating distance between sheets
and bedside tables,
spilling candle-wax on toe-nails
that refused to react.
Covers were never meant
for ten minute honeymoons
and fleeting theft of emotions,
but for my love
and his.
Author notes
Prompt::
"I'm nobody. It's the easiest thing to remember. So remember it."
-El Wray [Planet Terror]
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. [10 Entries] by Naridill.
525 points, ended May 3, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Now you tell me:
Comments
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Oh.. love the beauty of imagery beneath here. The mood is created from beautiful phrasing yet deadly images.
Thanks for entering,
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very expressive... especially the part "covers were never meant for ten-minute honeymoons"
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you always manage to put deep imagery in the words that you use and the wya you always express the quote so much more. best of luck
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Very nice!
You have a great ability to create imagry. I particularly enjoyed the imagry of this part:
"spilling candle-wax on toe-nails
that refused to react."
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Hey this is really good like your poetry! What inspires you?
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"Covers were never meant
for ten minute honeymoons
and fleeting theft of emotions"- art.
your poetry always has a fresh flair of originality, nicly done Cha.
~un.
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Call me Cha again and you're murdered.
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