She flies within his heart and soul
And gives his spirit perfect form
Yet he will never give his whole
To keep her warm
He takes her passion for his own
Too little love he has to give
And with the seed that he has sown
She cannot live
When he is firm within her mind
Their bodies one and flown away
She makes a blow for womankind
And ends the play
She carries him to find a reed
Takes back all she had to give
She eats her man to fill her need
For young to live!
A contest entry
- DRAGONFLY~~~TRANSFORMING FRAGILE INTO FIRE by Ithica & Blue Rew by Blue Rew.
3000 points, ended May 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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of course as a man this made me squemish, so "mission accomplished" were we all not so withholding and mad at each other. this rings of truth and reflects the gender dance. Just a note sometimes women "never give ... their... whole.
lovely and scary.
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This is an explosive sentiment in verse!
Powerful conveyance of karma's circles at
work in life and love. I love the direct
reference to the dragonfly's carnivorous
abilities. Thank-you for this. Blue -
In a straight forward fashion, you have shown yet another of the feminine traits... Nurturers with a strong maternal instinct and the will to survive... We [women] would do well to learn something from the dragonfly... While we don't have to eat them [men] we certainly aren't stuck with the bad ones for life... unless we choose it!!!
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Ew she eats him..lol...
A wonderful write.
I really love the flow of this piece and the imagery as well..even if she eats him in the end..lol
Well done..
Best wishes with this entry.
~A~
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If my mate would eat me, it wouldn't be much fun
chew into little pieces, and swallow one by one.
when she had her fill, a taste of yesteryear
I'd be processed meat, a memory for my dear...
rudolf
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Beautiful take on the prompt. You have created motion in a metered flow. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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What a cold-blooded chick the dragon fly is; I think spiders do something like this too. Glad we humans don't eat our mates...this both informative & funny...
novy
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Not half as glad as I am!!!
And not sure I like your sense of humour
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She carries him to find a reed
Takes back all she had to give
She eats her man to fill her need
For young to live!
I wondered why I like the dragonfly, WEG!
I enjoyed reading this very much.
xxx Jem
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Now, this is good, with a capital Goo!
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OK that beats JINGS
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Nothing beats Jings. Jings are wild.
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Now I know you've always refused to say if DAMN or JINGS was top, but now I know!
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Well done representation of this carnivorous creature. "When he is firm within her mind
Their bodies one and flown away
She makes a blow for womankind
And ends the play"..my favorite part.
Good luck in the contest.
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