Every raindrop that falls from the sky
Only falls because you cry
I can see your eyes full of hope
And your Dreams of love a flood
You wish and pray that someday
You could find truth in love
And find the real thing
But tonight it rains
As it’s not rained before
I can feel your pain
I can feel your heart beat
I know everything you're feeling
Because I too have felt the same
I want to help you
I want to only love you
And on this night as those sweet raindrops fall
I feel one drop gently onto my face
And run gently down my cheek
This is your tear
Every time I see the rain
I think of you
Every time of the day
My mind is full of thoughts of you
If only, If only
You were here
If only, If only I was there
I will someday come to you
And I will show you what love really is
I won’t hurt you
I won’t desert you
I won’t deceive you
I will only ever love you
I will only ever need you
I will only ever desire you
You are all I see
You are all I need
And when I’m there
It won’t rain any more
Because I’ll dry your eyes
And fill your life with happiness
With love
And in just one moment
Forever will become possible
And love will be
The victor
As are you and as am I
In loves grasp we will soon be
This is not just a dream
It's our destiny
A contest entry
- Whatever Your Heart Desires by xxhoopstar21xx.
300 points, ended June 8, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you have emotions? by Forgotten Anomaly.
550 points, ended October 27, 182 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is lovely.
I really like the whole concept of this piece.
I was drown to is because of the title [[I Loooove the rain]] and I'm glad I took a look.
You have talent, keep up the good work
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Not bad keep up the good wor
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Aw I really like this. I liked from when you started and till it ended. <333 I love the last two lines. This is really good. Keep up the good work.(:
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I like this a lot. The feelings are relatable and well-written out. The only crituque I have as the same as below - you might want to choose between freeverse and rhyme.
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Wow
That's really sweet and really sad, I know those feelings I have had them too. Nicely done and keep on writing.
Night Mistress 1
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Only 1 critique: Is this free verse or rhyme? It sometimes sounds like both. But a little tweaking can fix that, easily. You definately get your feelings across, which is the whole point of poetry (at least to me). Well Done.
Blessed be,
***Rae***
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Hummz, Nice Write
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/We%20Are%20Against%20Every%20Blood%20Traitor%20of%20Humanity
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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waw! just beautiful!
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I really like this poem. It has alot of emontion in it.
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god, i am sorry that i am so stupid and mean to you josh, i really am... i have a habit of hurting people that are good to me, and i just dont know why... im really glad that we are friends tho, i really am...
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wow! this is a really good poem! lots of emotion was put into this, and the imagery was really cool. you must have really felt this persons pain, and its cool that you were there for her... i have an idea of who it's about... but i could be wrong. but just a comment... you are hurting her now if its about her... good job! i love it!
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aw, very sweet poem. you could feel your heart extending out of the page. Longing, desire. Well done I hope you find this love one day.
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wow, rip out my heart here. really amazing write. i could feel the emotion and pain that went into this piece. wow...
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oh my... this was awesome! it was off the hook! really heart-felt and filled with sorrow!
but the iagery was poweful, the eotions were raw... cut deep into my heart and the poem had brilliant flow! your lines were amazing... and i love the way u connected tears of sorrow with raindrops! a very creative write i have to say! 
~RANJI
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Josh...You are a GREAT writer, never forget that...You are a sweet guy and everything else...just in case I dont get to see you again...I miss you being at school for me to bug you...and hope you are doing well!!! Your poems are great Josh...never forget that your poems make you who you are and no matter what Josh you will find that someone who will love you forever...!!
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wow
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Wow omg that made me cry that was really good i like it alot wow and thank you so much on the comment you gave me about The Wall Wow keep it up great job
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that was really good. it was sad and touching. the diction was right on target. i loved it and keep writting like that, just a little shorter next time it kinda seemed like it dragged on but i still loved it
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Good.
I really liked this 1. U r such a SWEET guy. U r the best!!! <333 -
Wow, your words have great flow...
And imagery is very beautiful, it was like a conversation.
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aww... I'm sure every girl wishes someone felt that way about them... lovely
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great
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great loved it u keep it up
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this is a beautiful poem. i really liked reading it.
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I wouldn't normally expect a great poem like this to have gramatical errors....
"I know everything your feeling
Because I to have felt the same"
should be
"I know everything you're feeling
Because I too have felt the same"
"And when I’m there
It won’t rain no more"
I'm sure you did that one on purpose, but I don't like it.
"It won't rain any more" is better. Good grammar is very romantic, you see!
Otherwise, great write! The stanzas were very pleasing to the eye, I very much liked the lengths of them.
I liked this stanza: If only, If only
You were here
If only, If only I was there
and I can relate. Same with this:
Every time I see the rain
I think of you
Every time of the day
My mind is full of thoughts of you
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this is sooo beautiful ... it has touched and inspired me
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this is a great write. Keep it up.
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Great piece; I have definitely felt this way before! It is relatable to just about everyone I believe! Every one searches for love; some find it, others search longer! Still, a very, very good write.
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Wow.....this is such a nice poem.so Deep and meaningful.Great write.
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i like this one better than the rest... i really do. and it made me smile, a lot. does this mean, by any chance that you are actually going to talk to me again?
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*speechless*.........................................................................omygod!!!!!!!!!!I cant explain how much this touched me. This poem is so beautiful. This in the wierdest way diescribes me in every word. Omygosh I love it! I wish I could give you a million points
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