you never meant these rogue hands to explore
the crescents sculptured in your back;
chain-strummed pristine chords
to the tenement off-beat rhythm of
"I love you, but..."
and as nascent narrations twined nostalgia to knots,
tore our body loose on other-worlds-
[I escaped a paradox
undid my skin...]
a husk, seethed to reality.
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. [10 Entries] by Naridill.
525 points, ended May 3, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sorry..........did not understand the last verse, but congrats on the gold! Nice write.
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A very deep piece, also carries a lot of emotions. Short, and to the point, nice work and congrats on your gold trophy.
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awesome!!!!!
that is one of the best writings ive read on allpoetry!!!!!!!! awesome!!!
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I enjoyed your work - vivid imagery in every line
S23
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wow..
I am speechless...I guess that is what great poetry does to you...at least to me..thanx for sharing..and congrats on the gold..MUCH DESERVED...blessings..namaste..
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What an opener - what a middle and what an end - these tempts trade beauty in health - and love creates such dark yet beautiful poetry from within you.
Thanks for entering,
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How on earth did this NOT place!?????
A FANTASTIC approach of though to emotion coursing... This is probably my favorite thus far, of what I have had the pleasure to read. This one reached inside my own stale heart and pulled the strings aching within. Excellent imagery - I just cannot even say it enough. I absolutely LOVED this. Write on!!!
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I agree with Melissa
Well done!!
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this really is excellent, the only line that stuck out a bit to me was line one of the second stanza, otherwise really nicely done.
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There is a perfect contest for this... I will send you a link!!! This is masterful... PS- See other comment??? hehe!
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You need a mental asylum, you know..
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why??
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where's the part where this sucks because you can't write?
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um... all'ov'it?
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O.o
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