Ah todo que tengo es el suyo
Heart's hearth will be echoing passion's flame
And I will keep the home-fires burning low
Ah todo que tengo es el suyo
Love me ever gently before you go
Two lives forged in love will bring us no shame
Ah todo que tengo es el suyo
Heart's hearth will be echoing passion's flame
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Author notes
Prompt: a love that is prevented due to certain circumstances ~ Translation from Spanish to English: Oh todo lo que tengo es tuyo/ Oh everything [all] I have is yours... Form used: Triolet ~ Art Credit: Painting by Pino
A contest entry
- a soft caress left - thoughts on love prevented by adsaige.
1800 points, ended June 4, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Not bad ...
not bad at all. I could read the Spanish and I don't speak Spanish.
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content: 30 grammar: 20 message: 30 revelence: 20 impact: 35 [135]
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What more can one say to this writ.. other than...
simply beautiful!
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very nice art of words you chosen here you did a very great job lady on this best of luck with you in this contest this was a pleasure
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Perfectly poetry ...
I loved this, softly sensual.
Apostrophe exit line: heart's
Myra
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myrataal
Fixed it! Thank-you!!! cia
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Me gusto
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A very beautiful and gentle piece of poetry. Portrays the heart and feelings of a lover so sweetly and accurately.
My favourite line was "Love me ever gently before you go"
One woulb be so lucky to be loved and to feel their love being returned. Very soothing and calming. Excellent!
Cheers! God Bless!
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Este poema esta muy linda. Me gusta mucha. Me sugiero que tu use un otro color para los palabras.
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brat prince lestat
Gracias- que color hacen usted prefiere...?
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Es posible que use negro o blanco, pero no es necesario. Me sugiero que tu uses un color que esta mas facil leer.
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brat prince lestat
Lo oscurecí un poco... -
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Gracias.
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Este poema es hermoso, apasionado y seductive.
Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Amera
Tan hermoso como usted...
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who's?
between the pillars and the hard marble floor, echoes resound like trade wind flurries in a midstream semanticism. a turbulent symbolistic claim staked to a foreign language; a hardened artery; a lime gentry or a coral stain on a white laced hem. whatever it is that's going on here, must somehow be correlating to a common resistance, or a deeper desire i'm oblivious to...
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Lovely!
You are very gifted, and thanks for sharing hun.
All the best within the contest, I enjoyed this.
Peace, Timothy
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so soft and sensuous even the background is soft and sensuous, a delight for my soul
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bravo
very nifty, and VERY complicated, indeed!!! I liked this a whole bunch, believe me! I would not even attempt something so difficult! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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I LOVE THIS POEM!
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wonderful Cia,
it feels much like a song
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Oh passion
I am wanton
Oh your body
So suggestive
Of thing whispered
In lover's ear
My heart
Which screams
A lovers lust
Awaits
Your hearts hearth
...........joe
Ps
thats not bad for being a spur of the moment write,lol
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