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a day for dying

Watching his life being drained slowly from his body,
holding his cold clamie hands, hearing nothing but the frail words of regret.
Looking into his once bright blue eyes filled with pain,
nothing could be done but let go but I held this hand
of the man who helped make me .

How hard it was to be strong?

When all I wanted was to lay there and dye myself.
But my mother needed me,

I was the one who was there.
Not my choice but out of necessity, no one else could get away.

Not their fault they have lives to lead

 

How hard it was, how much we cried , the day we all said our goodbyes.

4 years have pasted...

The pain's still there...

How raw it is in our hearts.

no one can replace him, so why even try?

 

He loved us then and he loves us now.

Even in the here and now, after I hear his call...

"Don't give up ,help when you can

try not to judge your fellow man."

 

All hard lessons he tried to teach us

may we learn them well

and still we remember His will    

 

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this is for Our dad may he still be proud of us now and then he did love you Lee

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  • Eric Marsh
    July 25
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    hurt

    the hurt never goes away...your dad is proud of you...as is mine of me after 20 years.......


  • mast-apoorva
    July 25
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    great job

  • lovely poem


  • individuality gold member
    May 4, 2008

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    a good poem, ah death, it is a constant companion of life, even to us who are still alive we feel the pain of death.


  • CountryCousin
    May 1, 2008

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    So true.

    Today I watched and nursed a lady of 98 that passed away from brain cancer. Her pain and suffering was great. There are some misspelled words in this piece but I understand and sense your pain. My mother also died from brain cancer in 2001. So I think that your father knew how much you loved him. Be at peace poet.


  • Lord Merlynn
    April 28, 2008

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    Sis, this brought tears to my eyes. It still hurts us both, I know, even though I know its been four years.
    On a topic not related to the content of the poem, it could do with a tiny touch of editing, want some help?

    To this poem, however, I feel biased, and wished I could give it gold. However, I will add to finalists list. Thank you Sis, for writing this lovely piece, I know Dad would have wanted us to remember him in different light. What was it that he said? From that movie?

    "Remember me with smiles and laughter, or not at all?" Or something like that?


  • isabelwk
    April 28, 2008

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    How sad

    I lost my dad too, but rather suddenly. Losing a loved one over time, little by little has to be excruciating. Very nice words.


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    April 28, 2008

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    Loosing any family member is hard, I still wish I could ask my father advise but then I'm reminded of the pain he was in and how that has all stopped now. This was a lovely tribute, well done I'm sure he would be proud.
    cyberartist

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