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Minor Discrepancies.

Bad kids,
cigarettes glued
to their sneers,
bobbing up and down between
angst filled curses.
roaring along back roads
baseball batting mailboxes
with hideous laughter,
echoing amidst the splinters
sucking brews from pilfered cans,
open garages their storehouses
for free alcoholic hazes,
turning six-packs into pot bellies.
back seat smoke fests,

in a blueish wreathed cloud
as bubbling bongs burn buzzes,
till the bubble of a police car,
burst the bubbles of
their youthful innocence.
Guilty as charged
on all counts,
off to Juvie hall
where they will learn
better ways to be
bad kids.

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  • XxTwigxX
    May 6, 2008

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    Yesh.. Oh so true.. I liked this alot.


  • Deathless1
    April 30, 2008
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    the back ground makes it even more perfect.


  • sheltered
    April 28, 2008
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    Excellent title... and "ways to be better bad kids"
    Great summise.


  • requiempoet gold member
    April 28, 2008
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    I'm so very glad I'm a good kid. So so so very glad!! Yay me!

  • Papagallo
    April 28, 2008
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    Your verse ended with a fact. They go to jail and come out worse. My solution, send them to the Marines, Army, Navy, etc. They do not want them. There is no Foreign Legion in this country. So lets put them on a penal island that is sourounded by sharks and let them fester uhtil they die or reform. Sorry for my mood today. All in all, a great poem.

  • Deathless1
    April 28, 2008

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    i really like the terms you used to discribe the kids.
    and the ending of getting in trouble really makes the cake. thanks for entering!

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