gale taps sleeping currents
waves wake up
walk to shores
caught napping
fishermen find little choice
water fire spreads
trail leaves
sorrow with tears
water cannot wash
nor wind dry
Author notes
I saw tsunami devastating sea shore, I am living in tropical place few miles away from sea
A contest entry
- Tropical Cyclone by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 28, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a great piece!
Congrats on your silver here
and keep up the great work!
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Cool write I loved it the whole concept and the way you used your word.........It was absolutely F-A-B-O-U-S-L-O-U-S............ the way u put everything together was so cool and the words you used flow together nicely......This has to be one of my favorite poems........... Dont ever stop writing.............................I definetly will have to check out more of your work.........very good again.........keep it up.
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Your poem does not convey the death and destruction cause by a natural disaster, your style of writing in this poem would be more suited to contemplation and reflection not pending doom.
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This was a very great piece, I liked it very much. I hope all is well now with the weather, I'm sure it must have been very frightening to see that but yet so inspiering. Nice write and congrats on winning silver
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This is excellent. Your descriptions are ingenious. I love "waters fire spreads" how you combine two dangerous things, and the raging water is like an inferno of fire. And this part:
gale taps sleeping currents
waves wake up
walk to shores
What a powerful beginning!
A sad subject, but a marvelous poem.
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So sad, but very well written. I enjoyed the flow very much. The imagery was very well done too. Though very sad it was a nice read. Thanks for sharing
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Absolutely wonderful imagery..a lot expressed here on this short piece..Congrats on the trophy!
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brilliant!
i genuinely liked this poem a lot. it has great imagery, power and expressions. no wonder it got a silver... deserved a trophy for sure! very crisp and yet descriptive use of language. i feel your being a hydrologist and poet just does wonders!
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Exceptionally creative and completely detailed with feeling and emotion... x
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Excellent
A very good example of compressed words that have the crispness of daily expressions and depth of original philosophy. Congrats and Best Regards!
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NIcely Done Dear Brother
First two stanzas read as a haiku kinda. Like your imagery in this. That had to be a very scairy and devastating event for you and your family. Good luck with this in the contest 
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