Beaded in flowery designs
she throws her hat
in the air.
Oh!What innocence.
In my heart
she lies
like summer dreams.
~a sweet kiss~
swept away
Her memory painted
in my minds
last windy hysteria
~forever~
Author notes
About one of the sweetest girls I knew! Her innocence made me smile..and everytime there is wind it reminds me of her!
A contest entry
- Tropical Cyclone by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 28, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautifully expressed.
Congrats on the Gold.
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thanks
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How immensely creative and sincerely metaphoric... x
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Thanks for the gold!
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Stanza 3 -halfway through a poem, to introduce an unknown pronoun is a little late.
Aside from that it was a lovely little poem, sweetly encapsulating a moment.
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Thanks! I corrected that too! Its my first story telling small poem so...i usualyy go for an image or emotion!
Thanks for the help!!
pri
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Thank your for the read.
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Thank you for reading tc..
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Lovely metaphor in his with the winds and being swept away.. Great take on the prompt!
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I am glad u liked it!
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